Desires Lost But Love Remained

[DustinDestruction]

I wrote this poem around the month of February of this year. I don't usually rhyme but I wanted too for this poem. I mostly do free verse, I love writing free verse poems. I wrote this from much pain and suffering that a girl caused me. And that love is still there. So tell me what you think of this poem? Be honest and tell me what it means to you.


Meeting you at a moments first glance
Realizing you’re the one for fortuitous hope
Your eyes have caught me in such an alluring trance
Letting everything fall into oblivion of never fatuous recope

Memories always flashing from the hurtful past
Eventually releasing my starstruck heart to never hear again your laugh
Laying lifeless with no reason to breath of your crossover faithful half
Forever there will be gentle disturbance of your perfect craft

Evidence lasting for eternity of mind-blowing pain
Heavenly burden to never kiss your once perfect lips
Rarely the time to have such break down to crying vain
Danger of detaching the beating from within my weakening rip

Consuming the love, plustering it into deafening silent fare
Hibernation to your upcoming conscious contrite state
Deadly disconcern to crystallizing breaking to anew for rare
Finally the starting for beginning of ending to your fate

[DustinDestruction]

People tell me what you think of this poem.

[kalci]

i'm sorry.... i can't concentrate (i'll read it later tonight....)..... but randomly your poem was written on my b-day ^^

[amalie_byrd]

i love it...plain and simple...she obviously hurt u and it seems as if the pain never goes away...to me this means basically the past 3months its very similar to what ha been happenening...i actually just messaged my friend about it before i read this...*freaky*...lol ur a very talented writer..

[DustinDestruction]

Originally Posted by kalci

i'm sorry.... i can't concentrate (i'll read it later tonight....)..... but randomly your poem was written on my b-day ^^

It’s alright, did you read it again?
Awesome, it was written on your birthday.
So what do you think of this poem?

Originally Posted by amalie_byrd

i love it...plain and simple...she obviously hurt u and it seems as if the pain never goes away...to me this means basically the past 3months its very similar to what ha been happenening...i actually just messaged my friend about it before i read this...*freaky*...lol ur a very talented writer..

Yay, I am glad that you love it!!

You understand a lot of it and not many people comprehend all my poems because some are confusing and too deep.
I am glad that you people such as yourself can relate to my poetry.
Wow, that is awesome but freaky in a good way though. ^.^
Aww thankies, I am a very talented writer, I know. :]
I will continue to post more poems up!!

[kalci]

hey! i read the poem (a bit late, but i couldn't find it!) i like it ^^

[[Ashesweallfalldown]]

its really good and i like ur word choice...its rare you find someone with a wide vocabulary as you and thats really cool...this poem is very good and i can like almost fel the hurt in it...ur that good im srry that she hurt you but i love the poem

[DustinDestruction]

Originally Posted by kalci

hey! i read the poem (a bit late, but i couldn't find it!) i like it

I am glad that you like it!!
What did it mean to you?

Originally Posted by [Ashesweallfalldown]

its really good and i like ur word choice...its rare you find someone with a wide vocabulary as you and thats really cool...this poem is very good and i can like almost fel the hurt in it...ur that good im srry that she hurt you but i love the poem

A lot of my poems are good and I use a weird, different way for my word choice.
I know, not many people have a wide vocabulary such as me and its totally cool!! -
Yay, I am glad that you think its very good!! ^.^
Some can relate to my poetry and feel the pain and depth from it.
I am glad that you think I’m good!!
Its alright, it was in the past and I am better!
I am glad that you love the poem, I will continue to post more poems up!!!!

[kalci]

well, he met a girl, and fell in love, but she cheated on him, and he was dying inside, and then idk..... either she died at the end or he wanted her to, how he was saying that he was over her =/ i like the beginning the most though, i like to imagine them in a 1800's masquerade ball, seeing each other, and this is going to turn into a story if i don't hush, but i really like the beginning =P

[DustinDestruction]

Originally Posted by kalci

well, he met a girl, and fell in love, but she cheated on him, and he was dying inside, and then idk..... either she died at the end or he wanted her to, how he was saying that he was over her =/ i like the beginning the most though, i like to imagine them in a 1800's masquerade ball, seeing each other, and this is going to turn into a story if i don't hush, but i really like the beginning =P

Wow, some of what you said is true but what you said could be different things that could be right.
That may have been confusing for you and I know that it may have been. lol
Although, what that could be right was not the idea for my poem.
I am glad you understand!!
But the imagery of what you said was awesome!
I liked it!!
No, you should keep going and tell me what you were going to say. lol