Guilty Pleasure

[DustinDestruction]

I wrote this poem around August of last year. What do you think of it? And please be honest when telling me your opinion of it.
I am way better than in the past when writing poems so this may not be as good as my newer poems and I know that.
But just tell me what you think of "Guilty Pleasure"


All meaning there
Never leaving my form
Everything so right

Make sure to keep desire
Hope springing forth
Breathing ever so softly

You know what you want
Nothing stopping your creation
Your dreams soon realized

Pleasure taking control
The want unbearable
Touching causes extremity

So much hope
Locking at eyes
Pulling each other in

Time slowing down
No care in the world
Pounding hearts together

Locking the love
Wondering whats next
Remains all need

Wishing closer
Ever so bright
Don’t go

Separable we aren’t
Living as one
Reborn into another

Take it easy
We have time
This won’t end

Pain no meaning
Feelings bring happiness
Good times continuing

Pleasure expanding
Lengths increasing
Beginning new

[[Ashesweallfalldown]]

omghunny thats really godd i love it!alot

[Rock Hard 88]

Very good.

[DustinDestruction]

Yay, I am glad that you love me poem!!
I am going to put more poems up but you should check the poem called "Desires Lost But Love Remained"
I rhymed in that poem and I think that it is really good, so look at it and tell me what you think of it. ^.^
But what did you think of "Guilty Pleasure"?